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The chart given compares male and female athletes in terms of the number of people competing in the Olympics since it commenced while the graph illustrates the figure for the total participants during the period shown. In general, according to the chart, in the first 60 years from 1924, the number of men athletes significantly outnumbered that of women. As can be seen from the graph, the number of participants rose enormously during the surveyed period. It is noticeable from the chart that the 1924 – 2012 period witnessed the huge number of male participants rising from 3000 people to a peak of 6000. Nevertheless, the rate of male participants was just approximately 20% over the years, which was negligible in relation to the figure for females. From the statistics, it could be inferred that there was a sharp growth in the number of women athletes competing in the Olympics from 1924 to 1984, even triple that of the previous years. In 2012, the gap between male and female athletes was significantly narrowed by a steep increase of 3000 in the number of female athletes. Moving on to the line chart, the number of people taking part in the Olympics increased considerably from 3000 to 6000 throughout the first 60 years since 1924. During the remainder of the surveyed period, the number of participants went up substantially, peaking at 11000 people.

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