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The table illustrates the data and forecasts relating to growth in percentage of seniors 65 and over in Canada, Germany and in the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030.

The table illustrates the data and forecasts relating to growth in percentage of seniors 65 and over in Canada, Germany and in the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030. Overall, over the given period all three nations showed a dramatic increase of the senior population. Whereas the percentage of elderly people followed a similar trend in both Canada and Germany, the growth in the UK has not been as significant. Furthermore, while the Canadian and German population aged 65 and over is expected to leap respectively of 10. 03% by 2030, the English rate, which increased only marginally from 1998 to 2000 of 0. 66%, is predicted to rise of a modest 6. 23% by 2030. Finally, the predictions for 2030 indicate that the change of the population aged 65 years old and over in Germany will be 30. 42%, followed by approximately 4 percentage points less in Canada (26. 35%) and about 10 percentage points less in the UK (20. 35%).
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of seniors 65 and
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in Canada, Germany and in the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030.

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period all three nations
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a dramatic increase of the senior population. Whereas the
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of elderly
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followed a similar trend in both Canada and Germany, the growth in the UK has not been as significant.

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of 10. 03% by 2030, the English rate, which increased
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from 1998 to 2000 of 0. 66%,
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to rise of a modest 6. 23% by 2030.

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, the predictions for 2030 indicate that the
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of the population aged 65 years
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and
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in Germany will be 30. 42%, followed by approximately 4
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points less in Canada (26. 35%) and about 10
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points less in the UK (20. 35%).
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the data and forecasts relating to growth in percentage of seniors 65 and over in Canada, Germany and in the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030.

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