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The chart below gives the information about the types of music albums purchased by people of Britain according to sex and age.

The chart below gives the information about the types of music albums purchased by people of Britain according to sex and age. NM33q
The given graphs enumerate the percentage of pop, rock and classical musical albums purchased by different groups of ages and gender in Britain. Overall, it can be said that male is the dominent buyer of all sort of music albums than of female. The pop abd rock music are popular among males, teenagers and adults whereas classical music is preferred by the people above the age of 45. According to the provided data, over 30% of pop music is acquired by the 25 to 34 age group whereas nearly 30% of pop genres consumers are from the age between 16 to 24 years. Moreover, males have higher number of listeners i. e, above 25% of albums. The females and people aged between 35-44 groups purchase less than 20% of albums and the lowest sales are exactly 10% from 45 plus year category. Similarly, to the pop music, rock music has higher number of buyers of 30% and 28% from the categories of adults and teenagers. Though, the women and mid aged people are less engaged whereas the income from old group is only 8%. The third chart represent the classical music and it has huge difference as elderly people are more involved in classical albums and purchases are 20% of music and 15% of albums are purchased by 25-34 years group. In contrast, the other categories are seemed to be less interested in classical, purchased not even 10% of music.
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classical
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albums
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purchased
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groups
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ages
and gender in Britain.

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be said
that male is the
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dominent
buyer of all sort of
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music
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albums
than of female. The pop
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abd
rock
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music
are popular among males,
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teenagers
and adults whereas
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classical
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music
is preferred
by the
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people
above the
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age
of 45.

According to the provided data, over 30% of pop
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music
is acquired
by the 25 to 34
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age
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whereas
nearly
30% of pop genres consumers are from the
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between 16 to 24
years.
Moreover
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albums
. The females and
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people
aged between 35-44
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groups
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less than 20% of
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albums
and the lowest sales are exactly 10% from 45 plus year category.

Similarly
, to the pop
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, rock
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music
has higher number of buyers of 30% and 28% from the categories of adults and
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teenagers
. Though, the women and mid aged
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are less engaged whereas the income from
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is
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8%.

The third chart represent the
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classical
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music
and it has huge difference as elderly
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people
are more involved in
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classical
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albums
and
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purchases
are 20% of
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music
and 15% of
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albums
are
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purchased
by 25-34 years
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group
.
In contrast
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are seemed
to be less interested in
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classical
,
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purchased
not even 10% of
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music
.
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