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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dol between 2000 and 2006.

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dol between 2000 and 2006. keLjR
The bar chart compares the turnover in dollars from sales of video games for four different platforms, namely mobile phones, online, consoles and handheld devices, from 2000 to 2006. It is clear that sales of games for three out of the four platforms rose each year, leading to a significant rise in total global turnover over the 7 were at least twice as high as those for any other platform in alm In 2000, worldwide sales of handheld games stood at around $11 billion, while console games earned just under $6 billion. No figures are given for mobile or online games in that year. Over the next 3 years, sales of handheld video games ros decreased by $2 billion. Mobile phone and online games started to become popular, with sales reaching around $3 billion in 2003. In 2006, sales of handheld, online and mobile games reached peaks of 17, 9 a respectively. By contrast, turnover from console games dropped to its lowest point, at around $2. 5 billion.
The bar chart compares the turnover in dollars from
sales
of video
games
for four
different


platforms,
namely
mobile phones,
online
, consoles and handheld devices, from 2000 to 2006.

It is
clear
that
sales
of
games
for three out of the four platforms rose each year, leading to a

significant rise in total global turnover over the 7

were at least twice as high as those for any other platform in
alm


In 2000, worldwide
sales
of handheld
games
stood at around $11
billion
, while console games

earned
just
under $6
billion
. No figures are
given
for mobile or
online
games
in that year. Over the

next
3 years,
sales
of handheld video
games
ros


decreased by $2
billion
. Mobile phone and
online
games
started
to become popular, with sales

reaching around $3
billion
in 2003.

In 2006,
sales
of handheld,
online
and mobile
games
reached peaks of 17, 9 a

respectively
. By contrast, turnover from console
games
dropped to its lowest point, at around $2.
5 billion
.
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