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The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. q36r
The circular charts elucidate the proportion of major energy sources in The United States of America in 1980 and 1990. Overall, it is apparent that maximum energy was produced using oil, whereas energy generated from hydroelectric power had been accounted least. By casting a fleeting glance, in 1980, the major percentile of power was generated from oil witnessed well over two-fifths, whilst 33 percent power had been produced after a decade from oil. By contrast, approximately a quarter of total energy of America was manufactured from natural gas in both years. Further scrutinizing the details, 22% power was being generated from coal in 1980 in The States, however after ten year, an increment of 5% had been registered for the production of energy by utilization of coal. Meanwhile, America produced similar per centum of power from hydroelectric power in both years. Surprisingly, energy generation from nuclear power burgeoned by 5% in the given latter year.
The circular charts elucidate the proportion of major
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energy
sources in The United States of America in 1980 and 1990.

Overall
, it is apparent that maximum
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energy
was produced
using oil, whereas
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energy
generated from hydroelectric
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power
had
been accounted
least.

By casting a fleeting glance, in 1980, the major percentile of
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power
was generated
from oil witnessed well over two-fifths, whilst 33 percent
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power
had
been produced
after a decade from oil. By contrast, approximately a quarter of total
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energy
of America
was manufactured
from natural gas in both years.

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Further
scrutinizing the
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details
, 22%
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power
was
being generated
from coal in 1980 in The States,
however
after ten year, an increment of 5% had
been registered
for the production of
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energy
by utilization of coal. Meanwhile, America produced similar per centum of
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power
from hydroelectric
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power
in both years.
Surprisingly
,
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energy
generation from nuclear
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power
burgeoned by 5% in the
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given
latter year.

IELTS academic The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

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