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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. dGkd
The given bar chart illustrates the basic objectives considered by adults to decide to study and the pie chart depicts the assumed cost sharing by people for each course in adult education. Overall, it is observed from the bar chat that, the two most influential reasons to decide to study are interest in the subject and gaining qualification. Furthermore, the maximum supposed cost is for the individuals. Regarding rationale’s to opt to study by adults; interest in the subject is believed to be the most crucial among all with 40 percent and for gaining qualification being second with 38 percent. Other reasons to choose to study, such as, helpful in current job, for promotion, enjoying education or to able to change job, all of these contributes half the percentage as the major two reasons. The least popular deciding factor to study is to meet people with just fewer than 10 percent. Looking specifically at predicted cost distribution for each course, majority of people gave highest proportion of two fifths to individual and just over a third to the employers. The taxpayers were given quarter proportion of cost sharing for every course, least of all.
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study
and the pie chart depicts the assumed
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sharing by
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people
for each course in adult education.

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from the bar chat that, the two most influential reasons to decide to
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are
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interest
in the subject and gaining qualification.
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cost
is for the individuals.

Regarding rationale’s to opt to
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by adults; interest in the subject
is believed
to be the most crucial among all with 40 percent and for gaining qualification being second with 38 percent. Other reasons to choose to
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study
, such as, helpful in
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current
job, for promotion, enjoying education or
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change
job, all of these contributes half the percentage as the major two reasons. The least popular deciding factor to
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study
is to
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fewer than 10 percent.

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distribution for each course, majority of
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over a third to the employers. The taxpayers were
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quarter proportion of
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sharing for every course, least of all.

IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared.

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4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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