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The chart below gives information on the percentage of boys and girls who participate in 4 kinds of sport outside school hours, including the percentage of those who do not.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of boys and girls who participate in 4 kinds of sport outside school hours, including the percentage of those who do not. 2r5GA
The given bar graph depicts that the information about the proportion of men and women take part in different types of games after school time, while the percentage of those people who do not so sport. Overall, it is clear that swimming and football os more popular sport in boys, whereas, the majority of girls engage in netball. At the first glance, it is vivid that the maximum percentage of male are interested in swimming and football with 20% and 16% as compare to female with 4% and 13%, respectively. Furthermore, 17% of women are preferred to playing netball, however, only 3% of men love to participate in it. Therefore, basketball is minimally more popular among boys with 8% and only 7% of girls are liked to taking part in it. Mostly the same proportion of both ganders do not like to play this kind of sports, which is approximately 5%.
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more popular sport in boys, whereas, the majority of girls engage in netball.

At the
first
glance, it is vivid that the maximum percentage of male
are interested
in swimming and football with 20% and 16% as compare to female with 4% and 13%,
respectively
.
Furthermore
, 17% of women
are preferred
to playing netball,
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3% of
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love
to participate in it.

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only
7% of girls
are liked
to taking part in it.
Mostly
the same proportion of both ganders do not like to play this kind of sports, which is approximately 5%.

IELTS academic The chart below gives information on the percentage of boys and girls who participate in 4 kinds of sport outside school hours, including the percentage of those who do not.

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