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Coastal town in Pentland difference between year 1995 and 2007

Coastal town in Pentland difference between year 1995 and 2007 oVEGB
he given map displays the changes of the past 57years in Coastal Town which is also known as the Pentland. By comparing the 1950 and 2007 maps of Pentland certain developments are noteworthy. It can be observed that a lot of people moved to Coastal Town by 2007 as the infrastructure and facilities became accessible for them in Pentland. Overall the main structure of the town with one main road with two bisecting roads remained similar. Whereas, the industrial area of 1950 located in the northwest region of the map was replaced with a park, swimming pool, multi-storey car parking and some shops in 2007. The car park on the east side of the road was removed and towards the right side of the eastern road, many new apartments and shops were constructed. Towards the southeast side of the Pentland was mainly the grassland in 1950, but with time many houses were built in that corner. Rest of the grassland area of the southwest corner of Pentland was converted into a cinema. Also the sea was developed into Yacht Marina covered by a half-circled road.
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given
map displays the
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changes
of the past 57years in Coastal Town which is
also
known

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as
the
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Pentland
.

By comparing the 1950 and 2007 maps of
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Pentland
certain developments are noteworthy. It
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can


be observed
that
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a lot of
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people
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moved
to Coastal Town by 2007 as the infrastructure and

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facilities
became accessible for them in
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Pentland
.

Overall
the main structure of the town with one main
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road
with two bisecting
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roads
remained

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similar
.
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, the industrial area of 1950 located in the northwest region of the map was

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replaced
with a park, swimming pool,
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multi-storey
car parking and
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some
shops in 2007. The
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car


park on the east side of the
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road
was removed
and towards the right side of the eastern road,

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many
new apartments and shops
were constructed
. Towards the southeast side of the
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Pentland


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was
mainly
the grassland in 1950,
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but
with time
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many
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houses
were built
in that corner. Rest
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of


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the
grassland area of the southwest corner of
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Pentland
was converted
into a cinema.
Also
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the


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sea
was developed
into Yacht Marina covered by a half-circled
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road
.
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IELTS academic Coastal town in Pentland difference between year 1995 and 2007

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185 words
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