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The graph shows crimes that took place in the city of Greenvale and arrests from 2010 to 2019.

The graph shows crimes that took place in the city of Greenvale and arrests from 2010 to 2019. dq5X6
the graphs depict the crime rates in three categories and arrests of adults and juveniles in Greenvale city between 2010 and 2019. Overall, It is clear that the most common crime in the city is Home burglary, However the number can be seen dropping over the period. There is a drop in number of car thefts too but little did the robbery numbers changed in the same span. In terms of arrests, while there was a drop in adult apprehensions, the number of juvenile arrests increased.
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Greenvale
city between 2010 and 2019.

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that the most common crime in the city is Home burglary,
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can be
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dropping over the period. There is a drop in
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of car thefts too
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did the robbery
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in the same span. In terms of arrests, while there was a drop in adult apprehensions, the
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of juvenile arrests increased.

IELTS academic The graph shows crimes that took place in the city of Greenvale and arrests from 2010 to 2019.

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