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The bar chart demonstrates the literacy rate of people by gender in various zone in 2011

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The bar chart demonstrates the literacy rate of people by gender in various zone in 2011. The vertical shoes the percentage of literacy rate and the horizontal shows the region. The purple is for female and the green one for male. The number of male and female in two areas were the same and in other groups number of women were lower than the men. In central Asia and central / eastern Europe both male and female columns were near the 100% but central Asia was a little more. Additionally, the lowest percentage can be found in Sub-Saharan Africa that for female was near the 60% and male between 60% and 80%. Furthermore, the most differences literacy rate between men and women was in south and west Asia that it was more than 20% also the most differences percentage of literacy rate for male was about 30% and female 40%. To sum up, the bar chart presents the differences literacy rate in different region also the percentage of male and female that were not the same in some areas.
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in two areas were the same and in other groups number of women were lower than the
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both male and
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columns were near the 100%
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in Sub-Saharan Africa that for
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was near the 60% and male between 60% and 80%.
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for male was about 30% and
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40%.

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