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Describe a bicycle/motorcycle/car trip you would like to go

Describe a bicycle/motorcycle/car trip you would like to go pa9E9
I live in a big and beautiful country called Vietnam where taking a car trip is certainly a matter of great adventure and enjoyment. Of course, so far, I have managed to have such car trips only to a few places, but today, I would like to talk about a car trip which I am really looking forward to. I want to take this car trip from my Hanoi (my home town) to Halong Bay which is about a 170 kilometres journey. Now, I must say that I have never taken such a long car trip before, so it is going to become equally challenging as well as thrilling. Of course, I wouldn’t take that car trip alone since travelling alone is no fun. On that occasion, I would not take a public bus since I will rent a car for this trip. So, I would take a couple of friends with me, who are not only good drivers, but also they have already taken a road trip to Hanlong Bay a couple of times, and it is them who actually have convinced me to take this car trip. Anyway, before I hit the road, I am planning to buy a road map so that I know what my itineraries are exactly going to be. By the way, I would take Haiphong Expressway for my car trip as it would cut the drive from Hanoi to Halong Bay from four hours to little more than two. Of course, I would need to pay some toll money to ride on this highway, but it is certainly worth the cost since it would allow me to have a speedier and shorter drive from Hanoi to Halong Bay. I want to take this trip to Halong Bay by a car because I have never really driven on a highway for a long. Besides, this car trip would allow me the flexibility to travel to places of our choices at our own pace. I want to travel to that place in a car also because it would allow us to reach our destination quicker and take breaks on the highway whenever we want.
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live
in a
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big
and
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beautiful
country called Vietnam where taking a
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car
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trip
is
certainly
a matter of great adventure and enjoyment.
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,
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so
far, I have managed to have such
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car
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trips
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only
to a few places,
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but
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today
, I would like to talk about a
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car
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trip
which I am
really
looking forward to. I
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want
to take this
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car
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trip
from my Hanoi (my home town) to
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Halong
Bay which is about a 170
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kilometres
journey.
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Now
, I
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must
say that I have never taken such a long
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car
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trip
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before
,
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so
it is going to become
equally
challenging
as well
as thrilling.
Of course
, I wouldn’t take that
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car
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trip
alone since travelling alone is no fun. On that occasion, I would not take a public bus since I will rent a
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car
for this
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trip
.
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So
, I would take a couple of friends with me, who are not
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only
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good
drivers,
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but
also
they have already taken a road
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trip
to
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Hanlong
Bay a couple of times, and it is them who actually have convinced me to take this
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car
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trip
. Anyway,
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before
I hit the road, I am planning to
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buy
a road map
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so
that I know what my itineraries are exactly going to be. By the way, I would take Haiphong Expressway for my
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car
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trip
as it would
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cut
the drive from Hanoi to
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Halong
Bay from four hours to
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little
more than two.
Of course
, I would need to pay
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some
toll money to ride on this highway,
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but
it is
certainly
worth the cost since it would
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allow
me to have a speedier and shorter drive from Hanoi to
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Halong
Bay. I
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want
to take this
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trip
to
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Halong
Bay by a
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car
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because
I have never
really
driven on a highway for a long.
Besides
, this
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car
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trip
would
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allow
me the flexibility to travel to places of our choices at our
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own
pace. I
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want
to travel to that place in a
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car
also
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because
it would
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allow
us to reach our destination quicker and take breaks on the highway whenever we
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want
.

IELTS academic Describe a bicycle/motorcycle/car trip you would like to go

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359 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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