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The chart and graph compare the number of Japanese who spent their holidays overseas from 1985 to 1995 with the proportion of them who visited Australia.

The chart and graph compare the number of Japanese who spent their holidays overseas from 1985 to 1995 with the proportion of them who visited Australia. In 1985, only about five million Japanese traveled abroad, after which the number increased steadily. By 1990, the figure had more than doubled to 11 million. Apart from a slight drop the following year, the upward trend continued until the end of the period, when numbers reached over 15 million. While Australia was the destination for under 2% of Japanese tourists in 1985, this percentage had risen to over 6% by 1994. The proportion grew consistently, apart from a slight fall in 1990 (4. 5% to 4%). After reaching its 1994 peak, the percentage declined marginally to 6% in 1995. Overall, despite the relatively small proportion of Japanese tourists coming to Australia, the increase in the county's share of the Japanese tourist market corresponded closely with the growth in Japanese tourism overseas generally, with a trebling of both in the ten-year period.
The chart and graph compare the number of Japanese who spent their holidays overseas from 1985 to 1995 with the proportion of them who visited Australia.

In 1985,
only
about five million Japanese traveled abroad, after which the number increased
steadily
. By 1990, the figure had more than doubled to 11 million. Apart from a slight drop the following year, the upward trend

continued until the
end
of the period, when numbers reached over 15 million.

While Australia was the destination for under 2% of Japanese tourists in 1985, this percentage had risen to over 6% by 1994. The proportion grew
consistently
, apart from a slight fall in 1990 (4. 5% to 4%). After reaching its 1994 peak, the percentage declined
marginally
to 6% in 1995.

Overall
, despite the
relatively
small
proportion of Japanese tourists coming to Australia, the increase in the county's share of the Japanese tourist market corresponded
closely
with the growth in Japanese tourism

overseas
generally
, with a trebling of both in the ten-year period.

IELTS academic The chart and graph compare the number of Japanese who spent their holidays overseas from 1985 to 1995 with the proportion of them who visited Australia.

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