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the changes to a park between 2010 and 2015. In 2010,

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The two maps show the changes to a park between 2010 and 2015. In 2010, the park was mostly polluted and unused and there was too much garbage that needed to be removed. The run-down area was transformed into a much nicer park in 2015. A lot of the buildings changed, with the former gas station replaced by a children's education center. To the south of this, the old factory was renewed as a factory museum with a café. Too much of the area was polluted or unused and these aspects were cleaned up. The old train line in the middle of the park was replaced with a nature walk and a few trees in the same location. To the northeast the polluted lake became a boating lake. To the south of this, the garbage was removed and a new playground feature was added.
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be removed
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into a much nicer
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, with the former gas station replaced by a children's education center. To the south of this, the
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factory
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as a factory museum with a café. Too much of the area
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or unused and these aspects
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old
train line in the middle of the
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park
was replaced
with a nature walk and a few trees in the same location. To the northeast the polluted lake became a boating lake. To the south of this, the garbage
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and a new playground feature was
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IELTS academic the changes to a park between 2010 and 2015. In 2010,

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