Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

What funny event or accident happened? When did it happen? Where did it happen? Who was there? How did people react?

What funny event or accident happened? When did it happen? Where did it happen? Who was there? How did people react? G3DkQ

Since I was young, my grandpa taught me to ride a bicycle. So I can ride the bicycle when I was about seven years old. One day, I rode the bicycle on the street with my friends. I jeered my friends while biking. At this time, I stepped on a stone and fell on the ground. My elbow hurt and bled from it. I cried aloud when I saw blood. My friends laughed heartily looking at me. My face was so funny due to it was full of tears and rhinitis. My mom run to me and said " Nothing happen. Don't cry. It's okay, baby. " At this time, I knew I was in pain. But now when I think about it, it is so funny.

Since I was young, my grandpa taught me to ride a bicycle. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 I can ride the bicycle when I was about seven years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
. One day, I rode the bicycle on the street with my friends. I jeered my friends while biking. At this time, I stepped on a stone and fell on the ground. My elbow hurt and bled from it. I cried aloud when I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 blood. My friends laughed heartily
 looking at me. My face was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:amusinghumorous
funny
 due to it was full of tears and rhinitis. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
My
 mom run to me and said Don't put a space on both sides of a quote symbolapply
" 
Nothing happen. Don't cry. It's okay, baby. Use a smart opening quote here: "“".“
"
 At this time, I knew I was in pain. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 when I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 about it, it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:amusinghumorous
funny
. 

IELTS academic What funny event or accident happened? When did it happen? Where did it happen? Who was there? How did people react?

Academic

American English

1 paragraphs

127 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
?
One main idea per paragraph
?
Include an introduction and conclusion
?
Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
?
Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
?
Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
?
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Labels Descriptions

?
Currently is not available
Meet the criteria
Doesn't meet the criteria