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Bar—The amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA and Germany

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The bar chart illustrates how much tea and coffee that was imported by Canada, the UK, USA and Germany in 2007 in tonnes. Overall, it is crystal clear from the graph that the amount of imported tea in the UK ranked first in the chart whereas that of imported coffee in the UK is the lowest. Moreover, the figure for both imported tea and coffee witnessed a fluctuation in 2007. In terms of imported tea, the amount of tea which Canada and the UK imported was similar with 20. 000 tonnes while Germany imported double the amount of tea, which was 40. 000 tonnes than Canada and the US. It is worth noticing that the UK imported 80. 000 tonnes which was the highest number in the chart. In terms of imported coffee, the amount of imported coffee in Canada and the US was similar with 39. 000 and 40. 000 respectively. Moreover, The UK imported 30. 000 tonnes which was less than Canada and US by 1000 tonnes. Germany imported the most coffee in all four countries in 2007. In conclusion, it is obvious that the UK took the lead in importing tea and Germany imported the most coffee. Moreover the figure for both imported tea and coffee witnessed a fluctuation in 2007.
The bar chart illustrates how much
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that was
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by Canada, the UK, USA and Germany in 2007 in tonnes.

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from the graph that the
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of
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imported
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tea
in the UK ranked
first
in the chart whereas that of
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imported
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coffee
in the UK is the lowest.
Moreover
, the figure for both
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imported
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tea
and
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coffee
witnessed a fluctuation in 2007.

In terms of
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imported
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tea
, the
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amount
of
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tea
which Canada and the UK
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imported
was similar with 20. 000 tonnes while Germany
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double the
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of
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tea
, which was 40. 000 tonnes than Canada and the US. It is worth noticing that the UK
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imported
80. 000 tonnes which was the highest number in the chart.

In terms of
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imported
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coffee
, the
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amount
of
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imported
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in Canada and the US was similar with 39. 000 and 40. 000
respectively
.
Moreover
, The UK
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30. 000 tonnes which was less than Canada and US by 1000 tonnes.

Germany
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the most
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coffee
in all four countries in 2007.

In conclusion
, it is obvious that the UK took the lead in importing
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and Germany
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the most
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coffee
.
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Moreover
the figure for both
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imported
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and
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coffee
witnessed a fluctuation in 2007.
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IELTS academic Bar—The amount of tea and coffee imported by Canada, UK, USA and Germany

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6.0
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