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Some people think that alcohol must be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

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Although alcohol has contributed a huge amount of advantage to the development progress in some countries, there are a lot of consequences when people use alcohol. I personally agree with the opinion that its consumption must be banned and will explain some reasons in this essay. Drunk is the most popular cause which leads to traffic accidents all over the world. Alcohol stimulates the brain’s cells and makes people cannot control their emotion as well as realize their behaviors. If people join the traffic while drunk, their situational analysis ability can be reduced and lead to accidents. For example, the annual survey about traffic accidents in Vietnam illustrates that the proportion of accidents due to drunk is the highest, about 80%. In addition, alcohol also brings a lot of disadvantages to people's health. Excessive levels of alcohol consumption have been linked to liver disease, heart disease, and neurosis. People who drink too much alcohol are likely to suffer from depression and heart attacks. For instance, my friend was a typical student in my class, he used to participate in a lot of parties with his friends and use to much wine. After two years, he was diagnosed with heart disease, his studying result also dropped dramatically, his family had to use all their budgets to pay for the hospital’s bills and were in a tight corner due to lack of money. In conclusion, alcohol brings a lot of negative effects to people’s lives, and I think the government should publish some policies for people who use alcohol or ban it to reduce traffic accidents and improve residents’ health.
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some
countries, there are a
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lot
of consequences when
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people
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use
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alcohol
. I
personally
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agree
with the opinion that its consumption
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must
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explain
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reasons in this essay. Drunk is the most popular cause which leads to
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traffic
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accidents
all over the world.
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Alcohol
stimulates the brain’s cells and
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makes
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people
cannot control their emotion
as well
as realize their behaviors. If
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people
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join
the
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traffic
while drunk, their situational analysis ability can be
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reduced
and lead to
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accidents
.
For example
, the annual survey about
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traffic
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accidents
in Vietnam illustrates that the proportion of
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accidents
due to drunk is the highest, about 80%.
In addition
,
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alcohol
also
brings a
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lot
of disadvantages to
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people
's health. Excessive levels of
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alcohol
consumption have
been linked
to liver disease, heart disease, and neurosis.
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People
who drink too much
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alcohol
are likely to suffer from depression and heart attacks.
For instance
, my friend was a typical student in my
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class
, he
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used
to participate in a
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lot
of parties with his friends and
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use
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to
much wine. After two years, he
was diagnosed
with heart disease, his studying result
also
dropped
dramatically
, his family had to
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use
all their budgets to pay for the hospital’s bills and were in a tight corner due to lack of money.
In conclusion
,
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alcohol
brings a
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lot
of
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negative
effects to
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people’s
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lives
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think
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government
should publish
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some
policies for
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people
who
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use
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alcohol
or ban it to
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reduce
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traffic
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accidents
and
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improve
residents’ health.
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IELTS academic Some people think that alcohol must be banned.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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