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The bar shows percentage of elderly citizens in three countries in 1980 2000 and 2030 in Germany, uk,Canada

The bar shows percentage of elderly citizens in three countries in 1980 2000 and 2030 in Germany, uk, Canada p578d
The graph details the percentages of elderly people in Canada, Germany, and the UK in the past with projections for the future. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that Elderly populations have risen and are predicted to continue to grow steadily in all countries. Germany has and will continue to have the highest proportion, while Canada will likely overtake the UK. In 1980, Germany had the greatest percentage of elderly at 15%, slightly above the UK and 5% higher than Canada. By 2000, percentages for Germany and Canada both surged by 5% (to 20% and 15%, respectively), compared to the UK which rose marginally to equal with Canada. By 2030, Germany is expected to rise by another 5% to 25%, with Canada surpassing the United Kingdom and finishing at 22% and the latter’s figures lagging behind slightly at just under 20%.
The graph
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the percentages of elderly
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people
in Canada, Germany, and the UK in the past with projections for the future. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that Elderly populations have risen and
are predicted
to continue to grow
steadily
in all countries. Germany has and will continue to have the highest proportion, while Canada will likely overtake the UK.

In 1980, Germany had the greatest percentage of elderly at 15%,
slightly
above the UK and 5% higher than Canada. By 2000, percentages for Germany and Canada both surged by 5% (to 20% and 15%,
respectively
), compared to the UK which rose
marginally
to equal with Canada.

By 2030, Germany is
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expected
to rise by another 5% to 25%, with Canada surpassing the United Kingdom and finishing at 22% and the latter’s figures lagging behind
slightly
at
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just
under 20%.
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IELTS academic The bar shows percentage of elderly citizens in three countries in 1980 2000 and 2030 in Germany, uk, Canada

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