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The bar graphs predict annual sales of two jean companies for next year, while the pie chart on the other hand shows the estimated shares of two companies in the region of turkey.

The bar graphs predict annual sales of two jean companies for next year, while the pie chart on the other hand shows the estimated shares of two companies in the region of turkey. Ygq3j
The bar graphs predict annual sales of two jean companies for next year, while the pie chart, on the other hand, shows the estimated shares of two companies in the region of turkey. Overall, the percentages of jean sold are claimed to experience rise for both companies and jack Apart from this, jones is predicted to be half shareholders of the market. As in first bar graph, The purchases of jeans will grow in both companies, but mango co. seems to have more growth than jack and jeans co. although jack and estimate to saw a downfall from January to February, seemingly in those four-month sales of this company will decrease around 21o thousand from over 400 million. On another side, margo and co will continue to have a steady improvement and sales of this month is forecasted to be almost 900 thousand As per the chart, Jack's and co said to hold half the shares of the market.
The bar graphs predict annual sales of two jean
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companies
for
next
year, while the pie chart,
on the other hand
,
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shows
the estimated shares of two
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companies
in the region of
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turkey
.

Overall
, the percentages of jean sold
are claimed
to experience rise for both
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companies
and jack Apart from this,
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jones
is predicted
to be half shareholders of the market.

As in
first
bar graph, The
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purchases
of jeans will grow in both
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companies
,
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mango co. seems to have more growth than jack and jeans co. although jack and estimate to
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saw
a downfall from January to February,
seemingly
in those four-month sales of this
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company
will decrease around 21o thousand from over 400 million. On another side,
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margo
and co will continue to have a steady improvement and sales of this month
is forecasted
to be almost 900
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thousand


As per the chart, Jack's and co said to hold half the shares of the market.
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IELTS academic The bar graphs predict annual sales of two jean companies for next year, while the pie chart on the other hand shows the estimated shares of two companies in the region of turkey.

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