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Cherry Jam making process

Cherry Jam making process 2lnV6

The diagram illustrates the whole process, through which the cherry jam is made. It is clear that there are nine main stages including collecting the ingredients, processing steps and packaging, respectively First of all, a sheet is spread on the ground in order to easily protect and gather the cherries falling off after the tree is shaken strongly. Next, those fruits are transported to the plant and undergoing several processing steps. After two preliminary stages, in which not only leaves and stems are pruned but the cherries are also washed to get rid of the dust, the stone of each cherry is taken out from the middle by plenty of metal spikes. The most important stage is to cook the cherries with extra ingredients such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin. If the outcome can pass the qualifier checked by experts in the manufacture, it will be packaged into jars. The final touch, stick on the label and cherry jam is ready to go.

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. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that there are nine main stages including collecting the ingredients, processing steps and packaging, Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphrespectively.respectively!respectively?respectively:respectively,respectively;
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This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, a sheet is spread
 on the ground in order to easily
 protect and gather the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
 falling off after the tree is shaken
strongly
. Next
, those fruits are transported
 to the plant and undergoing several processing steps. After two preliminary stages, in which not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
 and stems are pruned
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
 are also
 washed to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 rid of the dust, the stone of each cherry is taken
 out from the middle by This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
 of metal spikes. The most This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 stage is to cook the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withroseflamingmaroonglowingcardinalcrimson
cherries
 with extra ingredients such as lemon juice, sugar and pectin. If the outcome can pass the qualifier This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
 by experts in the manufacture, it will be packaged
 into jars. The final touch, stick on the label and cherry jam is ready to go. 