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The bar graph shows the teaching hours done bye teachers of 3 countries in 2001.

The bar graph shows the teaching hours done bye teachers of 3 countries in 2001. 2KbRk
The given bar ghaph illustrates the number of teaching hours in one year by tutor in five different nations namely Japan, Spain, Iceland and the USA in 2001. Overall, it can be observed from the chart that the USA had the highest teaching hours in all school, while Japan had the least teaching hours. Looking in the graph in more detail, in terms of teaching hours in Spain, primary and secondary had the exactly 600 hours per year, whereas upper had 1000 hours in a year in the same country. Moreover, Iceland had the similar teaching hours in secondary and upper secondary, it was 800 hours. Furthermore the learning hour in primary was 600 hours. Interestingly, Japan had approximately the same teaching hours in all three sections, which were around 600 hours in one year. Finally, with regards to the USA was on the top in all school. Which were nearly 900 hours, about 1050hours and around 1100 hours per year in primary, secondary and upper secondary school respectively.
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