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The bar chart compares the variation in proportion of the world population in four different countries from 1950 to 2003. It is also shows prediction for 2050. At first glance, it is observed that, the India had contained 15% of the world population in the year 1950. Likewise, China showed the highest percent of world population in that year which was about 24%. In addition, USA and Japan had noticed 7% and 4% population in 1950. Moreover, in 2002 China and India contained 17% and 20% of world population. While the USA and Japan holded 5% and 3 % in 2002. On the other hand, it is observed that projection shows that in India the population will be increase 17% and in China it will be fall down at 15%. Furthermore, USA remains steady in 2050 at 5%. At last, Japan will lose their population around 2 % in 2050. Overall, Indian population increases throught out time period, whereas China, USA and japan experienced a continuous decrease.
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in the year 1950.
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the highest percent of
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in that year which was about 24%.
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had noticed 7% and 4%
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in 1950.
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. While the USA and
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5% and 3 % in 2002.

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that in India the
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will be increase 17% and in China it will be fall down at 15%.
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will lose their
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around 2 % in 2050.

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