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The bar graph show the profit after tax of company from the year 1996- 2003.

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The bar graph illustrates the information about the profit after giving tax of car company from the year of 1996 to 2003. It can be observed from the graph, during 1997, the profit of company was 500 crores. There was significant change in upcoming year which was 650 crores. Whereas, the profit rate was suddenly decreased with same numbers of 1997. In 2000, company did not get better profit which was recorded as 300 crores. However, 2001 was a worst year because in this year company suffered from loss of 100 crores and in next year the profit rate was increased slightly but it was not too good as it was only 100 crores. The rate of company's profit was upto 150 crores during 2003. Overall, the profitable year of company was 1998 while, 2001 was very bad for company's growth.
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of 1996 to 2003. It can
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was 500 crores. There was significant
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which was 650 crores.
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rate was
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did not
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suffered from loss of 100 crores and in
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150 crores during 2003.
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was 1998 while, 2001 was
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IELTS academic The bar graph show the profit after tax of company from the year 1996- 2003.

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