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The bar graph provides information on the proportion of obesity amongst the sexes in four various countries in 2013.

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The bar graph provides information on the proportion of obesity amongst the sexes in four various countries in 2013. Overall, for each nation, the males had a more obese rate than the opposite gender. The highest percentage was shared by men in Iceland and Malta with just above 70%. A similar trend appeared in the female populace for Iceland and the USA (close to 60%), this value was the largest in the women segment. Virile natives in the USA had a ratio of a little below 70%, and slightly below this percent was the noted estimate for the UK. However, the fatness of another gender in the UK was the nadir of the graph, which had the amount of slightly under 60%. Lastly, a similar distribution of women with very small fluctuation was recorded for Malta.
The bar graph provides information on the proportion of obesity amongst the sexes in four various countries in 2013.
Overall
, for each nation, the males had a more obese rate than the opposite gender.

The highest percentage
was shared
by
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men
in Iceland and Malta with
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just
above 70%. A similar trend appeared in the female populace for Iceland and the USA (close to 60%), this value was the largest in the women segment. Virile natives in the USA had a ratio of a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
below 70%, and
slightly
below this percent was the noted estimate for the UK.
However
, the fatness of another gender in the UK was the nadir of the graph, which had the amount of
slightly
under 60%.
Lastly
, a similar distribution of women with
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very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
fluctuation
was recorded
for Malta.

IELTS academic The bar graph provides information on the proportion of obesity amongst the sexes in four various countries in 2013.

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