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The bar graph presents data about the members which adopted variety kind of books literature genre, from Lammertown public library from 1991 to 2001 and pie chart compared the gender library comers in 2010 As a general trend, the most membership of library was female than male sex in over the 2010 years.

The bar graph presents data about the members which adopted variety kind of books literature genre, from Lammertown public library from 1991 to 2001 and pie chart compared the gender library comers in 2010 As a general trend, the most membership of library was female than male sex in over the 2010 years. y1xE
The bar graph presents data about the members which adopted variety kind of books literature genre, from Lammertown public library from 1991 to 2001 and pie chart compared the gender library comers in 2010 As a general trend, the most membership of library was female than male sex in over the 2010 years. The genre which occupied the top notch stage in graph is romance in every year. From 1991 the romance increased steadily to 2001 about 400%. If looks more detail, we notice that the hited rock bottom in 1991 to 2001 years was the crime books which indicator showed that about 200% and 450% and exactly the same with the next genres such as autobiography, language, children books 600-400 percent. The touched highest point in diagram were the romance books 1000% in 1991, but commonly to 2001 years the indicators of library rocketed to 1400%, and the next book is self-improvement was little bit lower than previous book with 1000% results. And the most recent of genre popular books in Lammertown are thriller books with 800%.
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, from
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public library from 1991 to 2001 and pie chart compared the gender library comers in 2010

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female
than male sex in over the 2010 years. The
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genre
which occupied the
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. From 1991 the romance increased
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to 2001 about 400%.

If looks more detail, we notice that the
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rock bottom in 1991 to 2001 years was the crime
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which indicator
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that about 200% and 450% and exactly the same with the
next
genres such as autobiography, language, children
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600-400 percent.

The touched highest point in diagram were the romance
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books
1000% in 1991,
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commonly
to 2001 years the indicators of library rocketed to 1400%, and the
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is self-improvement was
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lower than previous
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with 1000% results. And the most recent of
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popular
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in
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Lammertown
are thriller
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with 800%.
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IELTS academic The bar graph presents data about the members which adopted variety kind of books literature genre, from Lammertown public library from 1991 to 2001 and pie chart compared the gender library comers in 2010 As a general trend, the most membership of library was female than male sex in over the 2010 years.

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