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The table compares the percentages of two sexes(women and men) in employment in Canada, Sweden and South Korea in 2005 and 2015.

The table compares the percentages of two sexes(women and men) in employment in Canada, Sweden and South Korea in 2005 and 2015. 2LRJ

The table compares the percentages of two sexes(women and men) in employment in Canada, Sweden and South Korea in 2005 and 2015. Overall employment rates in all countries increased, with only some exceptions for the male part, there side was slightly decreased. Looking at the details we can see that the employment rate of females was increased. For example in Canada in 2005 it was about 35% but in 2015 there considerably increased in 2015 to 20%. Also can be noted in South Korea and Sweden there were slightly increased in South Korea was increased from 30% in 2005 to about 35% in 2015 and in Sweden also was increased to 5% from 45% in 2005 to 50% in 2015. What about males part was not a big shift, in South Korea and Canada it increased a little bit, but Sweden on the contrary decreased.

The table compares the percentages of two sexes(women and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
) in employment in Canada, Sweden and South Korea in 2005 and 2015.

Overall
 employment rates in all countries You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
, with This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 exceptions for the male part, there side was slightly
 decreased.

Looking at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that the employment rate of females was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
. For example
 in Canada in 2005 it was about 35% This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 in 2015 there considerably
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
 in 2015 to 20%. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 can be noted
 in South Korea and Sweden there were slightly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
 in South Korea was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
 from 30% in 2005 to about 35% in 2015 and in Sweden also
 was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
 to 5% from 45% in 2005 to 50% in 2015.

What about males part was not a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 shift, in South Korea and Canada it You use this word too often, consider replacing it withheightenedexpanded
increased
 a Reduce redundancy by using "little" or "bit".littlebit
little bit
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 Sweden on the contrary
 decreased. 