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The bar graph illustrates the usage of internet by the student of Redwood Secondary School in the duration of seven year, 1995 to 2002, divided by gender. Overall, it is evident that consumption of network has been increased

The bar graph illustrates the usage of internet by the student of Redwood Secondary School in the duration of seven year, 1995 to 2002, divided by gender. Overall, it is evident that consumption of network has been increased 0MP5l
The bar graph illustrates the usage of internet by the student of Redwood Secondary School in the duration of seven year, 1995 to 2002, divided by gender. Overall, it is evident that consumption of network has been increased significantaly over period of time in both the sex. In majority, boys can be seen as the highest users of intenet as compared to girls. In detail, approximately, 100 number of student can be visualized in the www usage in the year 1995. There is steady and considerable growth in the years except 1998, 2000 and 2002, in consumption of network in a category of boys, acceeding the girl's usage nearly about 5% to 10%. The Year 200 has the highest number of male users, which are above 300. On other hand, female category gives remarks of less utilization of internet, except the years 1998, 2000 and 2002. The significant amount of female user can be seen in the year 2000, having count of more than 300 heads. In year 2002, girls merely acceds the boys.
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