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The bar graph gives information about the usage of three different phone lines (fixed local, fixed national and international, mobiles) in terms of minutes in billions in the UK between 1995 and 2002.

The bar graph gives information about the usage of three different phone lines (fixed local, fixed national and international, mobiles) in terms of minutes in billions in the UK between 1995 and 2002. 8xLPm
The bar graph gives information about the usage of three different phone lines (fixed local, fixed national and international, mobiles) in terms of minutes in billions in the UK between 1995 and 2002. In general look, there was a significant increase in the number of minutes of both mobiles and national-international fixed line calls throughout the period; meanwhile, the local calls fluctuated. Thus, they were quite close to each other at the end of the period. The number of national and international calls was under 40 billion minutes in 1995; however, it rose gradually and reached above 60 billion in 2002. The usage of local calls via fixed line peaked at 90 billion minutes in 1999; but after that peak, it saw a fall to almost 70 billion minutes in 2002 almost the same as in 1995. Interestingly, the mobile phone calls skyrocketed after 1999 and reached roughly 40 billion minutes in 2002.
The bar graph gives information about the usage of three
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fixed
local,
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national and international, mobiles) in terms of minutes in
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in the UK between 1995 and 2002.

In general
look, there was a significant increase in the number of minutes of both mobiles and national-international
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fixed
line
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calls
throughout the period; meanwhile, the local
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calls
fluctuated.
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, they were quite close to each other at the
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end
of the period.

The number of national and international
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calls
was under 40
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billion
minutes in 1995;
however
, it rose
gradually
and reached above 60
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billion
in 2002.

The usage of local
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calls
via
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fixed
line peaked at 90
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billion
minutes in 1999;
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but
after that peak, it
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saw
a fall to almost 70
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billion
minutes in 2002 almost the same as in 1995.
Interestingly
, the mobile phone
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calls
skyrocketed after 1999 and reached roughly 40
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billion
minutes in 2002.

IELTS academic The bar graph gives information about the usage of three different phone lines (fixed local, fixed national and international, mobiles) in terms of minutes in billions in the UK between 1995 and 2002.

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