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The bar graph gives information about the types of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups, such as native Australians, new migrants born in English-speaking countries, and recently arrived immigrants from other countries.

The bar graph gives information about the types of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups, such as native Australians, new migrants born in English-speaking countries, and recently arrived immigrants from other countries. R03rM
The bar graph gives information about the types of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups, such as native Australians, new migrants born in English-speaking countries, and recently arrived immigrants from other countries. Overall, as it can be seen, Australians prefer cinema unsurprisingly more than the theatre, while the popularity of the library for new migrants may reflect the importance of the financial circumstances of the new citizens. According to the figure, 70% of the aboriginal Australians and 50% of people from non-English countries spent their free-times for watching movies at the cinema, while this number is over 60% for newly arrived immigrants from English spoken communities. However, the theatre is less popular for all concerned, with only 10% of non-English speaking migrants attending, while double the number of aboriginals went to see a play. On the other hand, over 40% of native Australians visited animals from different species in the zoo, and less than two-fifth of the people preferred the library. In comparison between zoo and library, the native English emigrants spent their leisure time in the zoo, 10% more than the library (40%). In contrast, the zoo with 35% attendance is not as favorable as the library (55%) for the nations from other countries.
The bar graph gives information about the types of leisure activity engaged in by three distinct groups, such as native Australians, new migrants born in English-speaking countries, and recently arrived immigrants from other countries.

Overall
, as it can be
seen
, Australians prefer cinema
unsurprisingly
more than the
theatre
, while the popularity of the library for new migrants may reflect the importance of the financial circumstances of the new citizens.

According to the figure, 70% of the aboriginal Australians and 50% of
people
from non-English countries spent their free-times for watching movies at the cinema, while this number is over 60% for
newly
arrived immigrants from English spoken communities.
However
, the
theatre
is less popular for all concerned, with
only
10% of non-English speaking migrants attending, while double the number of aboriginals went to
see
a play.

On the other hand
, over 40% of native Australians visited animals from
different
species in the zoo, and less than two-fifth of the
people
preferred the library. In
comparison
between zoo and library, the native English emigrants spent their leisure time in the zoo, 10% more than the library (40%).
In contrast
, the zoo with 35% attendance is not as favorable as the library (55%) for the nations from other countries.
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