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The Bar chart illustrates how employed people reached to work in a city of New Zealand.

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The bar chart illustrates how employed people reached to work in a city of New Zealand. Overall, it can be seen that private car or truck used by passangers experienced the highest upward trend, while the people that used motorcycle and other means of transports showed the lowest downward trend. The people used private car was still the highest at the end of the period, eventhough there was a fall, meanwhile the passangers who used notorcycle and types of transports remained steadily through of the period. The rate of people that used private car or truck was 50% in 1996, being highest than other means of transportation rates by approximately 25%. Then it decreased to almost 15% during the period.
The bar chart illustrates how employed
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reached to work in a city of New Zealand.
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that private car or truck
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passangers
experienced the highest upward trend, while the
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motorcycle and other means of transports
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the lowest downward trend. The
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private car was
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notorcycle
and types of transports remained
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through of the period. The rate of
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private car or truck was 50% in 1996, being
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than other means of transportation rates by approximately 25%. Then it decreased to almost 15% during the period.
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IELTS academic The Bar chart illustrates how employed people reached to work in a city of New Zealand.

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