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The bar graph describes the percentage of Australians who were overweight from 1980 to 2010.

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The bar graph describes the percentage of Australians who were overweight from 1980 to 2010. To summarise, males were morbidly obese as compared to females. The obesity in males and females increased as years passed. Obesity amongst males has been ubiquitous since 1980. At the start of the year 1980, 40% of the male community were overweight. It has gradually increased. Within a decade, obesity amongst Australian men had reached almost 50%. In the year 2000, it was substantial and more than 60% of the male population in Australia was overweight. Again, in the year 2010, it had slightly reduced, reaching 60% of the population was overweight. On the other hand, a little bit more than 30% of women were overweight in 1980. It gradually increased as years passed and at a point it was stable. In 1990, more than 40% of the female population was obese, and for the next two decades, the proportion of women who were overweight was comparable (i. e. , slightly more than 50%).

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overweight
 from 1980 to 2010.

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males
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 and females increased as years passed.

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start
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year
 1980, 40% of the male community were You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
. It has gradually
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men
 had reached almost 50%. In the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 2000, it was substantial and more than 60% of the male population in Australia was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
. Again, in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
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reduced
, reaching 60% of the population was overweight.

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 more than 30% of women were You use this word too often, consider replacing it withobesecorpulentpudgy
overweight
 in 1980. It gradually
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overweight
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