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The bar chart below presents the percentage of the Australian male and female of different age group who are physically active in the year of 2010.

The bar chart below presents the percentage of the Australian male and female of different age group who are physically active in the year of 2010. 7Jj06
The bar chart below presents the  percentage of  the Australian  male and female of different age group who are physically active in the year of 2010. The chart indicates  the number of female who were  physically active that year higher than male almost in all age groups except the age group of 15 To 24 where that male percentage were higher than female which is 52. 8  and 47. 7. For example age group between 25 to 34, The  female percentage were  higher than the male which were 48. 9 percent and 42. 2 percent respectively. In the age group of 35 to 44  the percentage of female did physical active was  also  higher than male which Marked that 5 2. 5 percent of female were physically active and 39. 5% of Mele  were active. The chart also shows that in the case of age  group of  65 and over physical active was almost same. In this group  female were   little bit higher than male such as 46 percent of male were actively involved in physical activity whereas 47. 1 % of female was involve. By this chat we can conclude that in the year 2010 female were  physical more active than male almost im all age groups.
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the number of
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which is 52. 8
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and 47. 7.

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higher than the male which were 48. 9
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65 and over
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By this chat we can conclude that in the year 2010
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IELTS academic The bar chart below presents the percentage of the Australian male and female of different age group who are physically active in the year of 2010.

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