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The pie chart below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984,1994 and 2004.

The pie chart below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004. L098
The set of pie charts illustrate the percentage of students for opted to the various types of courses in the years of 1984, 1994 as well as 2004. Analyzing the former graph, in 1984 the most of pupils were enrolled in the face-to-face courses and it was 67%, while a mixed media had the lowest percentage (13%). When correspondence courses were 20% chosen by a student. Over the period of the 10 years, pattern was changed and one new subject added in the student’s syllabus, it was online course and it had 11%. In percentage of face-to-face courses was decreased about 13%, whereas mixed media show a little raised in their proportion (only 2%). Interestingly, the correspondence courses percentage remained unchanged. In 2004, mixed media course percentage increased and reached at the 35%, on contrast face to face courses continued to decline in student’s percentage. By contrast correspondence also dropped (15%) Overall, it can be seen that during the period of thirty years face to face courses proportion was fell, while mixed media show erratic gain in percentage.
The set of pie charts illustrate the
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of students for opted to the various types of
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in the years of 1984, 1994
as well
as 2004.

Analyzing the former graph, in 1984 the
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most of pupils
were enrolled
in the face-to-face
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courses
and it was 67%, while a
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mixed
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media
had the lowest
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percentage
(13%).
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When
correspondence
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were 20% chosen by a student.

Over the period of the 10 years, pattern was
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changed
and one new subject
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added
in the student’s syllabus, it was online
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course
and it had 11%. In
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percentage
of face-to-face
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courses
was decreased
about 13%, whereas
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mixed
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media
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show
a
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little
raised in their proportion (
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only
2%).
Interestingly
, the correspondence
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remained unchanged.

In 2004,
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mixed
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media
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course
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increased and reached at the 35%, on contrast
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face
to
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face
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courses
continued to decline in student’s
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percentage
. By contrast correspondence
also
dropped (15%)

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that during the period of thirty years
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face
to
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face
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courses
proportion was fell, while
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mixed
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media
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show
erratic gain in
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.
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