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The bar graph compares the wind energy production in four countries India, Denmark, Germany and the US between 1985 and 2000.

The bar graph compares the wind energy production in four countries India, Denmark, Germany and the US between 1985 and 2000. p1Bad
The presented diagram illustrates the wind energy produced by four nations, namely India, Denmark, Germany and the US throughout the period from 1985 to 2000. Overall, it can be explicitly observed that there is an upward movement in the wind power generation in India, Denmark and Germany, with Denmark showing the most notable growth among all the supplied countries. Whereas, the US saw a slight reduction despite being the highest producer of wind energy. At the beginning of the period, the US generated 1200 megawatts of wind energy, being the only country with a noticeably higher amount. The produced wind energy in Germany was one-third of that of the US, which was followed by Denmark and India, both of which produced roughly 200 megawatts. For the rest of the period, India witnessed a significant rise to 1200 megawatts of wind power. Similarly, the quantity of wind energy produced by Denmark drastically climbed before peaking at about 1600 megawatts, propelling Denmark towards the largest producer of wind power in 2000. Likewise, Germany experienced a growth but not as noticeable as India and Demark did. Wind energy production in this country was moderately raised by approximately 250 megawatts between 1990 and 2000. Whereas, the US was the only country registering a marginal decline in the last 10 years after a sharp increase from 1985 to 1990, becoming the second-largest generator of wind power in 2000 behind Denmark.
The presented diagram illustrates the
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produced
by four nations,
namely
India, Denmark, Germany and the US throughout the period from 1985 to 2000.

Overall
, it can be
explicitly
observed that there is an upward movement in the
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power
generation in India, Denmark and Germany, with Denmark showing the most notable growth among all the supplied
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countries
.
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Whereas
, the US
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a slight reduction despite being the highest producer of
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wind
energy.

At the beginning of the period, the US generated 1200 megawatts of
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energy
, being the
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only
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country
with a
noticeably
higher amount. The
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produced
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wind
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energy
in Germany was one-third of that of the US, which
was followed
by Denmark and India, both of which
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produced
roughly 200 megawatts. For the rest of the period, India witnessed a significant rise to 1200 megawatts of
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wind
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power
.
Similarly
, the quantity of
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produced
by Denmark
drastically
climbed
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before
peaking at about 1600 megawatts, propelling Denmark towards the largest producer of
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wind
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power
in 2000.

Likewise
, Germany experienced a growth
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but
not as noticeable as India and
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Demark
did.
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Wind
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production in this
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country
was
moderately
raised by approximately 250 megawatts between 1990 and 2000. Whereas, the US was the
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only
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registering a marginal decline in the last 10 years after a sharp increase from 1985 to 1990, becoming the second-largest generator of
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power
in 2000 behind Denmark.

IELTS academic The bar graph compares the wind energy production in four countries India, Denmark, Germany and the US between 1985 and 2000.

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