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The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emission in different countries in 2012.

The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emission in different countries in 2012. 3YybJ
The bar graph compares information about six different countries and their total co2 emission in the year 2012. Overall China and USA have emitted most amount of co2 than any other country also China has the highest amount of co2 emission, while Germany has emitted least amount co2. China has emitted more than 8000 metric co2, which was the highest by any country in that year. USA was second highest country to emit co2 with almost releasing 5000 metric during the year, although other Countries have not cross the mark of 2000 metric. India was emitting nearly 2000 metric co2 that year which was releasing half compared to the USA. Russia was not far away from India and was emitting nearly 1500 metric co2 and was followed by Japan which was only 3000 metric less. Germany was manage to release co2 under 1000 metric which was the least emission by any country in the year 2012.
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