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The bar graph below shows annual water usage by industries in some country

The bar graph below shows annual water usage by industries in some country eEaQA
The horizontal bar graph illustrates the information about early consumpation of water by seven industries in some specific nation. Units are measured in million of cubic metres. It is evident that chemical industries usage was dominant in case of groundwater about 430 mm as compared to public supply a huge difference of 90 M3 can be noticed in industries of machinery share water utilised from underground water and public supply feast almost 110 million of M3 water was consumed from water table for food which it is more to about 80 mm in public supply further information under 80 M3 water is consumed from water table in fuel and factories followed by public supply whereas 240 mm and 90 mm water was used from underground water and public supply in metal industries respectively hence it is apparent that maximum water is utilised in chemical industries whereas least amount of water had been found for fuel factory
The horizontal bar graph illustrates the information about early
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consumpation
of
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water
by seven
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industries
in
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some
specific nation. Units
are measured
in
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million
of cubic
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metres
. It is evident that chemical
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industries
usage was dominant in case of groundwater about 430 mm as compared to
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public
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supply
a huge difference of 90 M3 can
be noticed
in
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industries
of machinery share
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water
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utilised
from underground
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water
and
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public
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supply
feast almost 110 million of M3
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water
was consumed
from
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water
table for food which it is more to about 80 mm in
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public
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supply
further
information under 80 M3
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water
is consumed
from
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water
table in fuel and factories followed by
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public
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supply
whereas 240 mm and 90 mm
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water
was
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used
from underground
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water
and
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public
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supply
in metal
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industries
respectively
hence
it is apparent that maximum
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water
is
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utilised
in chemical
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industries
whereas least amount of
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water
had
been found
for fuel
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factory
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IELTS academic The bar graph below shows annual water usage by industries in some country

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