Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The charts show the frequency of happiness if different age groups and two groups of workers in Europe in the previous four weeks.

The charts show the frequency of happiness if different age groups and two groups of workers in Europe in the previous four weeks. 5BQmV
The given bar graph illustrates approximate ratio of people of 3 age groups, feeling themselves happy, while double pie chart provides data about frequency of being happy in the last month by full-time and part-time employers in Europe. Overall, the majority of people of all age groups experienced happiness in most of cases, while partial happiness was experienced by fifth, fourth, and approximately third part of society aged of 16 to 24, 25 to 34 and 35 to 49 as well. Similarly the pie charts illustrate percentage of full-time and part-time employed people, being happy by the last month. In terms of first bar chart it is noticeable that majority of people in terms of all age groups have felt themselves happy, 71. 5% of 16 to 24 aged, 65. 7% of 25 to 34 aged and 58. 9% of 35 to 49 aged to be precise. 21. 6% of people in a range from 16 up to 24 years were part-timely happy, while the part of people aged 25 to 34 years was at the point of 24. 8%. At the same time, 28. 9% of people who were older than 35 years felt the happiness sometimes in their lives in the last four weeks. Ratio of people aged from 16 to 24, 25 to 34 as well as 35 to 49, who haven't experienced happiness, was 6. 9% to 9. 5% to 12. 2%. This trend is supported by multiple pie chart which indicates the frequency of full-time and part-time employers who felt themselves happy. Regarding at the full-time employed part of European population, 64. 4% of full-time employed part of society felt happiness most of the time, while in terms of part-time employed people, 66. 5% of them used to be happy. Talking about workers in Europe who used to be happy some of the time, the ratio of people with constant work to people with part-time job in the last four weeks was 26. 4% to 24. 3%. The only part of society who experienced to be happy only a little time, constantly stayed the same throughout these four weeks, at 9. 2%.
The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
bar graph illustrates approximate ratio of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of 3 age groups, feeling themselves
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
, while double pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
provides data about frequency of being
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
in the last month by full-time and part-time employers in Europe.

Overall
, the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of all age groups
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experienced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
in
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the cases") or simply say "most cases".
most of cases
, while partial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
was
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experienced
by fifth, fourth, and approximately third
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of society
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
of 16 to 24, 25 to 34 and 35 to 49
as well
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Similarly
the pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charts
illustrate percentage of full-time and part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, being
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
by the last month.

In terms of
first
bar
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
it is noticeable that majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in terms of all age groups have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
felt
themselves
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
, 71. 5% of 16 to 24
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
, 65. 7% of 25 to 34
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
and 58. 9% of 35 to 49
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
to be precise. 21. 6% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in a range from 16 up to 24 years were part-timely
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
25 to 34 years was at the point of 24. 8%. At the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, 28. 9% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were older than 35 years
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
felt
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in the last four weeks. Ratio of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
aged
from 16 to 24, 25 to 34
as well
as 35 to 49,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
haven't
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experienced
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
, was 6. 9% to 9. 5% to 12. 2%.

This trend
is supported
by multiple pie
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
chart
which indicates the frequency of full-time and part-time employers
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
felt
themselves
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
. Regarding at the full-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of European population, 64. 4% of full-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of society
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
felt
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happiness
most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, while in terms of part-time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, 66. 5% of them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
. Talking about workers in Europe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, the ratio of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with constant work to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with part-time job in the last four weeks was 26. 4% to 24. 3%. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
of society
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experienced
to be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
,
constantly
stayed the same throughout these four weeks, at 9. 2%.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The charts show the frequency of happiness if different age groups and two groups of workers in Europe in the previous four weeks.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts