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The line graph gives information about the proportion of music turnover by three ways, namely streams, downloads and CD’s purchased from 2010 to 2018.

The line graph gives information about the proportion of music turnover by three ways, namely streams, downloads and CD’s purchased from 2010 to 2018. w72AN
The line graph gives information about the proportion of music turnover by three ways, namely streams, downloads and CD’s purchased from 2010 to 2018. From an overall perspective, it is evident that the percentage of music sales by streams (online) experienced an upward trend, whereas a reverse pattern can be observed in the figures for CDs purchased and downloads(offline). Looking at the graph for more details, at the beginning of the period shown, the percentage of sales from buying CD music was the highest, at approximately 55%. The figure for downloading method was lower, at nearly 35%. Money earned from streaming, however, accounted for the lowest percentage, at only 5%. As can be seen from the graph, the period of 8 years from 2010 witnessed a significant rise to 45% in the percentage of music turnover by streaming. By contrast, the sale from CD music bought was on the decline of 35%. A similar trend can be seen in the figure for downloading method, which reached its bottom at nearly 20% after slightly increasing to precise 40% in 2012.
The line graph gives information about the proportion of
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music
turnover by three ways,
namely
streams, downloads and
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CD’s
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purchased
from 2010 to 2018.

From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that the
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percentage
of
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music
sales by streams (online) experienced an upward trend, whereas a reverse pattern can
be observed
in the figures for
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CDs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
and downloads(offline).

Looking at the graph for more
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details
, at the beginning of the period shown, the
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percentage
of sales from buying CD
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music
was the highest, at approximately 55%. The figure for downloading method was lower, at
nearly
35%. Money earned from streaming,
however
, accounted for the lowest
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percentage
, at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
5%.

As can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
from the graph, the period of 8 years from 2010 witnessed a significant rise to 45% in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
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music
turnover by streaming. By contrast, the sale from CD
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music
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
was on the decline of 35%. A similar trend can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in the figure for downloading method, which reached its bottom at
nearly
20% after
slightly
increasing to precise 40% in 2012.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the proportion of music turnover by three ways, namely streams, downloads and CD’s purchased from 2010 to 2018.

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