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Essay about involvement of the international students and local students in Australia

Essay about involvement of the international students and local students in Australia b2oBQ
The line graph compares the number of overseas students in terms of local students registrated in Australia universities from 2001 to 2010. Generally, in 2001, the total of overseas students enrolled in Australia universities was only 20000 person while that of local students was 40000 students. In addition, the number of overseas students concerned increased sharply over 9 years starting from 2001. However, the registration of local students commenced in Australia universities went up gradually over 2years starting from 2001. It can be seen that the total of overseas students climbed constantly from 2001 to 2020. While number of local students enrolled still increased normally from 2001 to 2006. Additionally, local students commencing was a moderate fluctuation from 2002 to 2008 while that of overseas students was still increased. Especially, when the enrollment of local students stayed stable steadily, the overseas students reached its peak while the local students commencing decreased substantially
The line graph compares the number of
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overseas
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students
in terms of
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local
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students
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registrated
in Australia universities from 2001 to 2010.
Generally
, in 2001, the total of
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overseas
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students
enrolled in Australia universities was
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only
20000
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person
while that of
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local
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students
was 40000
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students
.
In addition
, the number of
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overseas
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students
concerned increased
sharply
over 9 years starting from 2001.
However
, the registration of
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local
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students
commenced in Australia universities went up
gradually
over 2years starting from 2001. It can be
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seen
that the total of
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overseas
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students
climbed
constantly
from 2001 to 2020.
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While
number of
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local
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students
enrolled
still
increased
normally
from 2001 to 2006.
Additionally
,
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local
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students
commencing was a moderate fluctuation from 2002 to 2008 while that of
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overseas
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students
was
still
increased.
Especially
, when the enrollment of
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local
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students
stayed stable
steadily
, the
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overseas
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students
reached its peak while the
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local
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students
commencing decreased
substantially
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IELTS academic Essay about involvement of the international students and local students in Australia

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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