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asking for help ti find a job

asking for help ti find a job JVGm0
Good morning, I hope you are well, too. yes, I applied for RefuAids language programmes to help with my English, to get a job and to apply for university. Unfortunately, it was an English programme with self-study. I wished it was face to face course. I am not sure about the possible help that your organisation would provide it. ( As for the university, I contacted some universities that offer Arabic and Islamic studies; they asked me for IELTS at least 6. 5. (until this time I couldn't do that)). It is one year course to be able to teach the Arabic language at public schools. I would like to discuss that I would like to work as an Arabic teacher and how that is possible. I attached my CV. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future. Kind regards Kholoud Gonbos
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Good
morning,

I hope you are well, too.

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yes
, I applied for
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RefuAids
language
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programmes
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with my English, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a job and to apply for university.

Unfortunately, it was an English
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programme
with self-study. I wished it was face to face course.

I am not sure about the possible
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help
that your
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organisation
would provide it.

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(
As for the university, I contacted
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some
universities that offer Arabic and Islamic studies; they asked me for IELTS at least 6. 5. (until this time I couldn't do that)). It is one year course to be able to teach the Arabic language at public schools.

I would like to discuss that I would like to work as an Arabic teacher and how
that is
possible.

I attached my CV.

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I
look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Kind regards

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Kholoud
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Gonbos
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IELTS academic asking for help ti find a job

Academic
  American English
10 paragraphs
144 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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