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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the difference in percentages of men and women employed in the year 2005 and 2015 in three nations (Canada, South Korea and Sweden). Overall, there has been an increase in the amount of women being employed in all the countries. The highest difference in men and women employment ratio can be seen in the case of South Korea. Firstly, the ratio of men employed in Canada has raised by nearly 10 percent whereas this is the exact opposite case with respect to the male working class in Sweden which has seen a decline in the working class of men, on the contrary, the percentage of both the countries in case of women being employed has gone upto nearly 50%. Finally, in South Korea the male employment ratio has increased to about 80 percent and accordingly the percentage of working women has also enhanced to just above 30%.
The bar chart illustrates the difference in percentages of
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and
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employed
in the year 2005 and 2015 in three nations (Canada, South Korea and Sweden).

Overall
, there has been an increase in the amount of
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women
being
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employed
in all the countries. The highest difference in
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men
and
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women
employment ratio can be
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seen
in the case of South Korea.

Firstly
, the ratio of
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men
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employed
in Canada has raised by
nearly
10 percent whereas this is the exact opposite case with respect to the male working
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class
in Sweden which has
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seen
a decline in the working
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class
of
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men
,
on the contrary
, the percentage of both the countries in case of
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women
being
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employed
has gone
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upto
nearly
50%.

Finally
, in South Korea the male employment ratio has increased to about 80 percent and
accordingly
the percentage of working
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women
has
also
enhanced to
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just
above 30%.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

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6.5
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