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The bar charts below show precipitation in hot desert climate grasslands in 1980 and 2000.

The bar charts below show precipitation in hot desert climate grasslands in 1980 and 2000. gm3d
These two bar charts give information about the rate of precipitation in sunny desert climate grassland in between 1980 and 2000. All units are measured in millimeters. In general, There was a huge gap between the rate of precipitation in twenty years period. The rate of rain drops in 1980 is significantly higher than 2000. In 1980 the rate dropped in summer season. In contrast in 2000, the rate went down in the beginning of the year. Firstly, in 1980, the overall rate of rain was between 150-320 mm. In the beginning of year it started with quite rainy days, just about 250mm of precipitation. And the number reached its peak in March and gradually decreased until June and reached the lowest rate (slightly over 50mm) throughout the whole year. Secondly, in 2000 the rate of rainy weather was exactly between 47-51mm for the whole year. The number was frequently went up and down comparing to the dynamic rate in 1980. The hottest month of the year was in March and April(47mm) However, the most rainy month was on July and August (51mm) in 2000
These two bar charts give information about the rate

of precipitation in sunny desert climate grassland in

between 1980 and 2000. All units
are measured
in

millimeters.

In general
, There was a huge gap between the rate

of precipitation in twenty years period. The
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rate
of

rain drops in 1980 is
significantly
higher than 2000. In

1980 the
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rate
dropped in summer season. In
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contrast


in 2000, the
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rate
went down in the beginning of the

year.

Firstly
, in 1980, the
overall
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rate
of rain was between

150-320 mm. In the beginning of
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year
it
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started
with

quite rainy days,
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just
about
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250mm
of precipitation.

And the number reached its peak in March and

gradually
decreased until June and reached the

lowest
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rate
(
slightly
over
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50mm
) throughout the

whole year.

Secondly
, in 2000 the
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rate
of rainy weather was

exactly between 47
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-51mm
for the whole
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year
. The

number was
frequently
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went
up and down

comparing to the dynamic
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rate
in 1980. The hottest

month of the
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year
was in March and April(
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47mm
)

However
, the most rainy month was on July and

August (
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "51 mm"
51mm
) in 2000

IELTS academic The bar charts below show precipitation in hot desert climate grasslands in 1980 and 2000.

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