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The bar chart shows unit sales of the Apple iPhone worldwide from 2007 to 2018 in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The given bar chart reveals information about the sales of smartphone namely iPhones in millions during the period from 2007 to 2018. On the whole, it is apparent that the figures rose gradually from the beginning and reached a peak in 2015 before slightly declining over the next year. Looking at the chart in more detail, in the first year, the figure for sales was 1. 29 million. Then, over the next 4 years, this number increased gradually, to 72. 29 million units. In 2012, there was a noticeable increase in sales which accounted for 125. 05 million iPhones. Also, over the next 2 years. this figure grew from 150. 26 to 169. 22 millions. As it was mentioned earlier, in 2015, there was a sharp growth in iPhone sales, making it the highest figure during the given timeframe, 231. 22 million iPhones respectively. However, in 2016, the sales experienced a noticeable fall which accounted for 211. 88 million units, although in the last two years of the period, the sales again increased and the quantity of phones which were sold in 2018 was 217. 72 million units.
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which accounted for 125. 05
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iPhones.
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grew from 150. 26 to 169. 22
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, in 2016, the
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experienced a noticeable fall which accounted for 211. 88
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again increased and the quantity of phones which
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows unit sales of the Apple iPhone worldwide from 2007 to 2018 in millions.

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