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The bar chart provides information about how many visitors to met,new york,edo tokyo and national of china museums during 2000 and 2005.

The bar chart provides information about how many visitors to met, new york, edo tokyo and national of china museums during 2000 and 2005. G3E5g
Overall, the number of people experienced a downward trend in edo tokyo, while other both museums showed an upward trend during this period. As well, the number of people had some big oscillations in all museums. Although, edo tokyo had a lower rate, it outrased met new york and national china at the end of the period. Edo tokyo divorce rate was about 13(mil) in 2011, being higher than met new York and national china's rate by approximately 1 and 7 (mil). Next year, only edo tokyo stayed contrast and others decreased considerably. So the number of peopledeclined gradually to the end edo tokyo, while both museum's number of peopleclimbed rapidly between 2001 and 2005. The number of people were the highest in national china. It was almost 16(mil). And the lowest was edo tokyo 10(mil) in 2005.
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