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The bar chart shows the type of activities 5 to 14-year-olds in Australia choose to participate in their spare time.

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The bar chart shows the type of activities 5 to 14-year-olds in Australia choose to participate in their spare time. The chart includes five categories and provides information on genders separately. It is clear from the chart that the most popular and the most universal type of activity is watching TV/videos for both boys and girls, 100 percents of girls and boys sometmes do that. However, in all other categories we can observe a gender based difference. Boys are more likely to play computer games as well as they more often devote their time on outdoor actvities such as "bike riding" and "skateboarding/rollerblading". 20% percents of boys decide to spend time in front of their laptops in comparison with girls. Girls, on the contrary, more often choose art and craft for their leasure time. More than a half of girls chooses this persuit while it applies only to 40% of boys.
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bike riding
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skateboarding/rollerblading
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. 20% percents of
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decide to spend
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in front of their laptops
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the type of activities 5 to 14-year-olds in Australia choose to participate in their spare time.

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