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The bar chart shows the proportion of people going to cinema on a week days in one erupeon country in 2003,2005and 2007.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people going to cinema on a week days in one erupeon country in 2003, 2005and 2007. L9GQ3
The infographic in the form of bar graph compares and contrasts the percentage of people visiting theatre in one European nation during the time period of four year. overall the maximum people visited cinema on weekends while others days was least popular among visitors. Turning to the details, in 2003 on Monday spectators went cinema most with the percentage of 10 which was declined in the following years with 11%. on Tuesday the proportion of people visiting theatre was ten times more of Monday in 2003, however in 2005 the figures fell to 16%. whereas Wednesday and Thursday had 16%and 10%proportion of moviegoers in the first year, both witnessed a decline in2005 former decreased by 1%and latter by 2%. , while in 2007wednesday showed a fall of 5% and Thursday rose with 10%. Moving further, interestingly, Friday was remained stable with the ratio of 30%visitors. However, Saturday had the highest figure of people going to cinema in 2003, while reached at peak in 2005with 45%, although witnessed a decline of42%in 2007. follwed by Sunday which also showed the same pattern.
The infographic in the form of bar graph compares and contrasts the percentage of
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in one European nation during the time period of four year.
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overall
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visited cinema on weekends while others days was least popular among visitors. Turning to the
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details
, in 2003 on Monday spectators went cinema most with the percentage of 10 which
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in the following years with 11%.
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on
Tuesday the proportion of
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was ten times more of Monday in 2003,
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in 2005 the figures fell to 16%.
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whereas
Wednesday and Thursday had 16%and 10%proportion of moviegoers in the
first
year, both witnessed a decline in2005 former decreased by 1%and latter by 2%.
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while in 2007wednesday
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showed
a fall of 5% and Thursday rose with 10%. Moving
further
,
interestingly
, Friday
was remained
stable with the ratio of 30%visitors.
However
, Saturday had the highest figure of
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people
going to cinema in 2003, while reached at peak in 2005with 45%, although witnessed a decline of42%in 2007.
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follwed
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also
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the same pattern.
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