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The bar chart shows the percentage of what people in four countries spent their money on in 2009.

The bar chart shows the percentage of what people in four countries spent their money on in 2009. 73LNA
The bar chart demonstrates the proportions of how much residents of four countries (the United Stated, Canada, Great Britain and Japan) paid for different products and services in 2009. In each of the four nations, most of the money went to eating and drinking, accommodation, and transportation, whereas people had to expend far less on healthcare and clothing. The Japanese and Britons spent 23% and 20% of their earnings on foodstuffs respectively, while the figures in Canada and the U. S. were around 15%. However, Americans made the most investment in housing, with over a quarter of their income set aside for this purpose. Surprisingly, their northern neighbors, Canadians, stand at the lower end of the spectrum, at 21%. When it comes to transportation, however, Canadians came out atop, having spent about one fifth of their money to this end. In contrast, transportation fares accounted for the least spending in Japan (10%). Regarding the smaller shares, American expenditure on healthcare was the highest at 7%, while the proportions in the other countries did not reach 5%. As far as clothes are concerned, items in this category cost citizens of all these nations around 5% of their budgets.
The bar chart demonstrates the proportions of how
much
residents of four countries (the United Stated, Canada, Great Britain and Japan) paid for
different
products and services in 2009.

In each of the four nations, most of the money went to eating and drinking, accommodation, and transportation, whereas
people
had to expend far less on healthcare and clothing.

The Japanese and Britons spent 23% and 20% of their earnings on foodstuffs
respectively
, while the figures in Canada and the U. S. were around 15%.
However
, Americans made the most investment in housing, with over a quarter of their income set aside for this purpose.
Surprisingly
, their northern neighbors, Canadians, stand at the lower
end
of the spectrum, at 21%. When it
comes
to transportation,
however
, Canadians came out atop, having spent about one fifth of their money to this
end
.
In contrast
, transportation fares accounted for the least spending in Japan (10%).

Regarding the smaller shares, American expenditure on healthcare was the highest at 7%, while the proportions in the other countries did not reach 5%. As far as clothes
are concerned
, items in this category cost citizens of all these nations around 5% of their budgets.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentage of what people in four countries spent their money on in 2009.

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