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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. XXYO
The given chart provides information about the ratio of annual visitors in three types of London Museums over the period from 2007 to 2012. Overall, it can be clearly seen that there was widely fluctuation in all three museums. According to the chart, it is vividly shown that, in 2007, the National Gallery had the lowest attendance rate amongst all museums with nearly 5. 3 millions visitors annually. However, from 2007 to 2012, National Gallery experienced an increase and reached a peak of approximately 15. 2 million people in 2012. Regarding Victoria and Albert Museum, in 2007, it had nearly 14 million audience per year, but in the following years, the museum witnessed a steady fluctuation and ended at 10 million visitors annually. On the other hand, at the beginning British Museum was the second popular museum with almost 13 million visitors. Although, the museum’s attendance plummeted till 2009. Starting from 2010, number of visitors sharply increased and finished at 13 million visitors per year in 2012.
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chart provides information about the ratio of annual
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visitors
in three types of London
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Museums
over the period from 2007 to 2012.
Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that there was
widely
fluctuation in all three museums.

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vividly
shown that, in 2007, the National Gallery had the lowest attendance rate amongst all
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museums
with
nearly
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millions
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visitors
annually
.
However
, from 2007 to 2012, National Gallery experienced an increase and reached a peak of approximately 15. 2
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million
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people
in 2012. Regarding Victoria and Albert
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Museum
, in 2007, it had
nearly
14
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million
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audience
per year,
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but
in the following years, the
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museum
witnessed a steady fluctuation and ended at 10
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million
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visitors
annually
.

On the other hand
, at the beginning British
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Museum
was the second popular
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museum
with almost 13
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million
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visitors
.
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Although
, the
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museum’s
attendance plummeted till 2009. Starting from 2010, number of
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visitors
sharply
increased and finished at 13
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million
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visitors
per year in 2012.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

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