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The bar chart shows the expenditure on five consumer goods in UK and France in 2010.

The bar chart shows the expenditure on five consumer goods in UK and France in 2010. p58ww
The stipulated bar chart elucidates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods cars, computers, books, cameras and perfume in UK and france in 2010. Overall, it is crystal clear that the UK spent more money on consumer goods than france in the period given. Both the British and French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras. On having a look at the bar chart, it is observed that in terms of cars, people in UK spent about 450, 000 on this as opposed to the french at 400, 000. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than french around 400, 000 and 300, 000 respectively. In the UK, expenditure on cameras just over 350000 double that of france, which was only 150, 000. Probing ahead, the amount of money paid out on the remaing goods was higher in france. Above 350, 000 was spent by the french on computers which was slightly more than British who spent exactly 350, 000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for 200, 000 of expenditure in France but under 150, 000 in the UK.
The stipulated bar chart elucidates the amount of
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money
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spent
on five consumer
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goods
cars, computers, books, cameras and perfume in UK and
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france
in 2010.

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, it is crystal
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clear
that the UK
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spent
more
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money
on consumer
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goods
than
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france
in the period
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given
. Both the British and French
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spent
most of their
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money
on cars whereas the least amount of
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money
was
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spent
on perfume in UK compared to cameras in France.
Furthermore
, the most significant difference in
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expenditure
between the two countries was on cameras.

On having a look at the bar chart, it
is observed
that in terms of cars,
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people
in UK
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spent
about 450, 000 on this as opposed to the
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french
at 400, 000.
Similarly
, the British
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expenditure
was higher on books than french around 400, 000 and 300, 000
respectively
. In the UK,
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expenditure
on cameras
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just
over 350000 double that of
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france
, which was
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only
150, 000.

Probing ahead, the amount of
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money
paid out on the
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remaing
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goods
was higher in
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france
. Above 350, 000 was
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spent
by the
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french
on computers which was
slightly
more than British who
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spent
exactly 350, 000. Neither of the countries
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spent
much on perfume which accounted for 200, 000 of
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expenditure
in France
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but
under 150, 000 in the UK.

IELTS academic The bar chart shows the expenditure on five consumer goods in UK and France in 2010.

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