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the bar chart shows the divorce rates of 2 countries in year 2011 to 2015

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The bar chart illustrates the percentages of divorce in Finland and England between 2011 and 2015. In Finland, the separation data in the year 2011 was about 38%. While, it had a gradual decline by 2012 for approximately 32% but eventually ratio grew to about 30% by year 2013. Moreover, the percentage was increasing simultaneously till year 2014 around 40% followed by the year 205 also. 

On the other hand, Sweden had much higher divorce rates than Finland. In Finland, data accounted for separation was around 43%, whereas, it gradually rose to around 49%. However, from year 2013 rates started declining. In 2013 data collected was around 46% and continued to decline steadily till the end of the period, reaching around 45% in 2014 and going to it’s lowest about 37% in 2015.
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of divorce in Finland and England between 2011 and 2015.

In Finland, the separation data in the
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