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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two european countries from 2011 to 2015

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two european countries from 2011 to 2015 N2MW
The bar chart provides about the percentage of divorces in finland and sweden between 2011 and 2015. overall, sweden experienced a downward trend, while finland showed an increased trend in overall time period. both countries divorce rates have some fluctuations. Although finland initially had a lower rate it outraced sweden at the end of the period. Sweden's divorce rate was approximately 45% in 2011, being higher than finland's rate by approximately 8%. Then it rose to almost 50% in 2012. However, The figure showed a gradual decrease of about 2 - 3% in 2013 and continued to decline steadily to the end of the period reaching to about 45% in 2014 and hitting a low-point of about 37% in 2015. Percentages of divorces in finland was less than 40% in 2011 and decreased in 2012 which is almost one-third of marriages in finland. However the figure experienced a gradual growth in next successive 3 years. It rose to approximately 39% in 2013, then increased slightly by around 3% and reamined constant for the next year, outracing the rate of sweden.
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